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Re: Poetry
« Reply #20 on: January 13, 2015, 09:00:08 pm »
I'm always really shy with sharing my work but i also really want critique, any opinions anyone???? (I only write lame metaphors and theyre really short)

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Re: Poetry
« Reply #21 on: January 13, 2015, 09:19:04 pm »
I'm always really shy with sharing my work but i also really want critique, any opinions anyone???? (I only write lame metaphors and theyre really short)

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Re: Poetry
« Reply #22 on: January 13, 2015, 09:33:50 pm »
Sing me a song like the songs of old,
Tell me a tale of a hero so brave and bold,
Who faced the odds and came out strong,
And went through hell to right their wrong.

This hero goes by many a name
And few truly know the extent of their fame.
Though no battles fought or wars did they start,
A different kind of fight did challenge their heart.

For upon them set a deep, unshakeable sadness
That many a time drove them to madness
And nothing they tried could remove this feeling
And it felt as if their life it was stealing.

This hero is not just one person you see,
This person is many, and one of them me.
And I can tell you through all that I know,
That this feeling of sadness is the hardest to show.

This feeling is something that can't be explained
But know that it's there, prolonged and sustained.
All of these people are the heroes untold
Facing great inner turmoil and standing bold.

Many a year did they suffer in silence
And struggled alone against their feelings with violence.
And while for me the world grew colder,
All I needed was a hand on my shoulder.

Not to guide me nor to steer
But a hand of comfort and not of fear.
A hand to stay with me through the long dark night,
And when ready, to help me step into the light.





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Re: Poetry
« Reply #23 on: January 13, 2015, 09:43:52 pm »
Sing me a song like the songs of old,
Tell me a tale of a hero so brave and bold,
Who faced the odds and came out strong,
And went through hell to right their wrong.

This hero goes by many a name
And few truly know the extent of their fame.
Though no battles fought or wars did they start,
A different kind of fight did challenge their heart.

For upon them set a deep, unshakeable sadness
That many a time drove them to madness
And nothing they tried could remove this feeling
And it felt as if their life it was stealing.

This hero is not just one person you see,
This person is many, and one of them me.
And I can tell you through all that I know,
That this feeling of sadness is the hardest to show.

This feeling is something that can't be explained
But know that it's there, prolonged and sustained.
All of these people are the heroes untold
Facing great inner turmoil and standing bold.

Many a year did they suffer in silence
And struggled alone against their feelings with violence.
And while for me the world grew colder,
All I needed was a hand on my shoulder.

Not to guide me nor to steer
But a hand of comfort and not of fear.
A hand to stay with me through the long dark night,
And when ready, to help me step into the light.


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Re: Poetry
« Reply #24 on: January 13, 2015, 09:45:51 pm »
I seriously hope not... If I have, I really really don't rememner...
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #25 on: March 15, 2015, 12:43:50 pm »
I live for the skies,
I live to by free!
See how the bird flies,
so careless, so at ease?
That is the gift I have been given,
by Luna and by Raven.

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Re: Poetry
« Reply #26 on: April 16, 2015, 10:40:37 pm »
This is not my poem.. but I wanted to share it.

The snatchits.

I'm a victim of the Snatchits,
They're committing little crimes,
But I've never caught them at it,
Though I've tried lots of times.

They have made off with my checkers,
And my pair of purple socks,
And my model double-decker bus,
And crackers by the box.

They are quick, and they are clever,
They are difficult to glimpse,
So I wonder if I'll ever catch,
The crafty little imps.                ~ anonymous poet~
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #27 on: April 16, 2015, 10:57:11 pm »
One day

I welcome the pain,
But always wish it would stop,
I want to rule the world,
Yet I hate to look at it,
I will never have to see it again,
One day,
Will you remember me,
That time we were laughing on the floor,
Those times are gone now,
One day,
I never thought it would happen this way,
When I am so young,
One day,
Tell them it's not their fault,
Tell them thank you for what they have done,
Tell them sorry,
Tell them goodbye,
One day,
Today.
I quickly write these things down when I am bored. I know it's bad.
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #28 on: April 17, 2015, 08:21:10 am »
What is music?

It is when the sun rises and sets
It is the cool air that sweeps across the landscape
The feeling you have when you are near someone you love.

The feeling of both happiness and sadness
Passion and uncertainty
Emotions collide in a sea of sound.

Music has life
Like a storm it is full of power
Changing the way people view and think.

Music goes straight to the heart
It bypasses any means of logical thinking
And it courses through your veins.

Measure after measure
Note after note
Telling a story that will let you know what the artist is feeling.

It is like entering a new world
A world full of beauty and excitement
Music is full of magic.
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #29 on: April 17, 2015, 10:14:16 am »
i have the first 2 chapters of a book im working on if thats allowed on here.
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James 5:13-14 Is anyone among you suffering? Let him pray. Is anyone cheerful? Let him sing praise. Is anyone among you sick? Let him call for the elders of the church, and let them pray over him, anointing him with oil in the name of the Lord.

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Re: Poetry
« Reply #30 on: April 20, 2015, 11:01:16 pm »
My heart still aches

My heart still aches,
it aches for your compassion,
it aches for your touch,
it aches for your love,

I remember it,
I remember the day in the rain,
I remember the time in the cafe,
I want those times to come back,

Now I'm sitting here,
While you're with him,
While you're not caring for me,
While you're wishing I was dead,

My heart aches,
I wish for it to stop,
The only memories of you to be gone,
I will never hurt again,
My heart still aches for love,
It still aches for you.

I really need to get better at poetry.
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #31 on: May 03, 2015, 11:38:40 pm »
Eagle - This board would be the place for your book, but this particular thread is for poetry. I reccomend making a new topic for it and you should be set to share it.

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Re: Poetry
« Reply #32 on: May 05, 2015, 02:25:03 am »
Soft winds carry sents,
Now! Swiftly run, dear tiger,
Before your prey flees.
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #33 on: May 31, 2015, 09:13:17 pm »
Dance with me
  Feel the shadows surround us!
Dance with me
  See the darkness within!

Dance with me
  Feel the stars shine upon us!
Dance with me
  See the twilight fall!

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Re: Poetry
« Reply #34 on: May 31, 2015, 09:32:43 pm »
I've been snagged, like a fish on a hook.
I saw light shine off the silver surface.. and I unknowingly took the bait.
Now my heart races every time I draw close,
I wonder if the line will snap, or if I'll be exposed in the cool cold air.
Will I be caught? If I am, will I be thrown back, or will she keep me?
I have been snagged by the fishhook of love.
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #35 on: June 01, 2015, 01:25:57 am »
Broken spirit
  shattered soul
See my heart
  twisted and dark?

Night soon
  mother moon
Heal this wound
  This evil heart

Silent screams
  forever fallen
You cannot wound
  an empty heart

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Re: Poetry
« Reply #36 on: June 01, 2015, 02:24:57 am »
Caught in a cage
a cage i can not See nor touch but i know is here

it silences my screams of fear
makes sure no one can hear

alone in this dark place
i ponder in the silence

the silence that is all too real

"will i ever escape from here?"
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #37 on: June 02, 2015, 05:30:24 am »
What better than the sun,
  To light my shadowy heart?
What better than the sun,
  To light my darkened soul?

Oh you, oh sun,
  You are my only one
Oh you, oh sun,
  Forever I shall hold you

My sun, I am your moon,
  The yin to your yang
My sun, I am your moon,
  I am your stars and you are mine

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Re: Poetry
« Reply #38 on: June 02, 2015, 08:04:35 pm »
Dance the night away,
Drop,
Pop,
Beep, jump, light up the darkness.
A black balcony,
Steam,
Lazer,
Bass, dee-dump, high-hat my cat.
Bridge the melody,
Rhythm,
Harmony,
Can't go to school with this beat pumping in my head.
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Re: Poetry
« Reply #39 on: June 10, 2015, 10:29:27 pm »
So, uh... just some venting here I guess...
Yeah, I know it's a little messy and talks about a bunch of different things but I can't really bother to clean it up a bit.


You weep and weep...
Broken hands to brush away the tears least they hit the dirt.
Heartache is a plague.
Something you drown in; a puddle that lies in the dirt.
Sink to the bottom where the light no longer shows
feel the pang in my chest.

Among those that know pain
none wish to see it in another.
If only you could know
how much I care...
how much it hurts...
that I can do nothing.

I reach to you
hesitantly
My hand touches glass.
Glass turns into a mirror
to reflect my own image back at me
I can only recoil in disdain.

What seems so close
is separated by a chasm within me.
I can reach across, but touch nothing...
To desolation we are damned.
A solemn curse borne by those whom cannot bear it.

Two hands
bridge the chasm
Two broken hands
One of scars
One tentative
One hand pulls away
One remains lost

To you, whom, knows pain...
Know that I have tried...
Remember me when you have gone on
Remember me when another finds you
Remember me when you are rid of the tears that filled your lungs
Remember me
on the other side of the mirror...
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