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Offline Eolties

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this happened in 5 minutes... 0_0
« on: October 08, 2016, 06:47:14 pm »
it's hard staying awake at night
it's always dark because a stranger turned off the light
i could tell you it's allright
but then there is him sometimes a her allways looking for a fight
you know who i'm talking about it's your hidden dark side
and me and you know we'd be lying if we said he or her haven't taken us for a ride
they drag us into a mental crevice our self hate the inner workings of a dastardly tale that is already planned
they of the dark side of our inner psyche think it is a joke that to look at for entertainment is oh so grand.
so when it feels like yourself hangs on the edge of a knife
stay away from your inner strife
no need to take your own life cause remember even darkness cannot exist without light
so when you go to bed sleep tight and don't let negativity bite.
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Offline Vlad

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Re: this happened in 5 minutes... 0_0
« Reply #1 on: October 08, 2016, 07:02:37 pm »
Hey, not bad! I like the free but uneven flow of it, it's almost like a rap, and it's pretty vivid IMO. I'd love to see more of it, if you practice some it'll seem a little less forced and more coherent in some parts. Pretty darn good for 5 minutes of work.  :fox-;):
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